During this class we wrote poems and short stories. The one I will share was used in my portfolio as a free write but it was written originally as a "metaphor for an emotion" poem.
Telescope
Open your eyes
And you can see everything
As you watch the stars
Melt through your fingertips
And become sweet and silky
You chase harder; blind
With a smile regardless
of the ignorance
Too high; you're too high now
Above reason
Mindless; free; lost
Grasping for the open
For the pain
is so raw
But it will unlatched and thin
As your eyes pull me in
Deeper
Can you guess the metaphor?
Thanks Francesca for hosting. :)
9 comments:
That's an amazing sky you've captured! Nice work!
Milky way?
Beautiful! But my english level is not good enough to capture the subtleties like metaphors! unfortunatly....
nice way to transition to college life!
i'm looking through my telescope, but can't find any emotion to match your writing - does it matter? poems should evoke emotions, even if we (readers) don't see it from exactly the same lens as the author. (I never took english 104, so the above is just rambling :))
lovely and beautiful photo!
Discovery and satori, is my perception... of this wonderful "attendance"
Beautiful and inspired poem and photo and post?
LOVE?!
PS I found your blog again!!
♡
PS sorry that first punctuation mark was an exclamation point!!
not sure how it became a question, maybe my low score in English 104 after living in Japan for many years:))
great transition. you're well underway with poetry, it'll be a fun ride, promise. n♥
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